Notes on 'Guts'

I love the concept for this chapter.

I am slightly concerned about the presentation.

My narrative voice... is slowly reverting to how it usually is and I'm a little lost about how to correct it, the bugger. That said, it does include a few defining features of Calysia's voice: the rambling sentence, for one, and there are also a few short, snappy lines. Just not enough.

On the plus side, I have no doubts that the basic premise is sound and that the idea of Calysia's mental operating theatre is awesome. Just have to rework a few segments.